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Post by Bardpado on Jul 3, 2008 7:44:51 GMT -5
I believe replacing 'emoness' with 'enthralling' or 'dark' would help to convince Glenn that's a good thing. After all, 'emo' isn't the only term for something which is creepy or unnerving. Yes, but this struck me with emotions similar to what I usually express. And EMOness is EMOness... at least, I'd say 75%, if it weren't for the Kayorei joke, I would've said 85%. I can't say I didn't like it, due to its descriptiveness. However, I did dislike the constant contrast between 'silly' and 'dark' quite a bit. It just does not help to create a serious plot-line, if you throw comedic relief before a serious piece. It can be interpreted as attempting to follow the same line of thought, and therefore reduces the impact of Daniel escaping and the amount of stress and turmoil the others may go through. Tell that to Jin Kobayashi for making School Rumble or SNK for making Metal Slug. For Part 4: Nice job, though I imagined it being like: "On our way back, we saw daniel phasing in and out of the others' rooms. After we entered, we were struck by shock at the sight of paralysis. "What the hell is this?!" I exclaimed. "This is what happens when a super-n00b comes in contact with a normal being..." The Furry replied, apparently in a sympathetic tone. "Is there any way at all to cure it?" I asked. "There is a way..." Bard replied. "We have to destroy the n00b..." I was deeply saddened that we would be able to help him after all. and them Bard continued. "That... or, we could always just give these guys some water and a good slapping." I slapped myself in the face like all cartoon characters do while I exclaimed "D'OH!". "That Apparently he's too strong for us. The scanners in this room say that he has a power level..." Bard had a very shocked and disturbing expression on his face just after reading the scanner and I gulped and fidgeted for a while while waiting for him to continue. " OVER 9000!!!!!!!!!!!!" He yelled as he crushed the scanner. "WHAT?! 9000! That can't be right! COULD IIIIIIIIIIT!!!!!!?" replied Furry in a much more disturbing face than Bard's. "1 7h1nk 1t5 r1t3!" Said a voice from behind. We turned around and were shocked to see daniel standing behind us. He threw a smoke bomb as us. Bard fainted immediately due to his secret condition which no one else was aware of. We had to drag him out by the legs since he went hitting us while mumbling some things like "Minus Strike!" or "Kupo round and round you go! MOOGLE!" whenever we grabbed him near the torso or by the arms." That's the time we continue on with your story. =P Couldn't help it. I love fanfics... I just consider this to be one of many. |
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Post by Foozdude on Jul 3, 2008 7:47:08 GMT -5
I believe replacing 'emoness' with 'enthralling' or 'dark' would help to convince Glenn that's a good thing. After all, 'emo' isn't the only term for something which is creepy or unnerving. Yes, but this struck me with emotions similar to what I usually express. And EMOness is EMOness... at least, I'd say 75%, if it weren't for the Kayorei joke, I would've said 85%. Ah, fair enough. Do you wonder why I don't like those series or games? :P But this is not the place for such a discussion. At least, not in my eyes. Should you want to pursue this, let's go to PM's. |
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Post by Onishiba on Jul 3, 2008 8:11:13 GMT -5
Fay's little history lesson:
In the year 1938 the German government asked the Austrian people if they wanted to join Germany as part of it. To assure everything was going right, German troops invaded Austria. They made a "democratic vote" and everyone who voted for "No to Germany" was arrested.
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Post by Bardpado on Jul 3, 2008 8:15:24 GMT -5
Fay's little history lesson: In the year 1938 the German government asked the Austrian people if they wanted to join Germany as part of it. To assure everything was going right, German troops invaded Austria. They made a "democratic vote" and everyone who voted for "No to Germany" was arrested. Too bad our report for yesterday wasn't on Europe... But what they did is something politically incorrect, I mean, how selfish could they have been? Or better yet, why were they selfish? |
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Post by Shinji-kun on Jul 3, 2008 8:16:28 GMT -5
And this is revelant to CTS how...?
Also, I don't think it's Doushinji, rather, Doujinshi.
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@bard - Isn't it obvious? They wanted a total domination over entire Europe. ...We, Polish people, were the first victims of the World War II.
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Post by Onishiba on Jul 3, 2008 8:18:49 GMT -5
Too bad our report for yesterday wasn't on Europe... But what they did is something politically incorrect, I mean, how selfish could they have been? Or better yet, why were they selfish? Well, they were Nazis after all. :3 shinji: Nothing. For Austrians it's just a bit of emotional topic to be confused with Germans. Though I'm still only a paper-Austrian. Also, thanks... confused your name with the word there. Edit: No, Shinji. Poland was not the first victim of the German expansion. Austria, and then Czechoslovakia, were the first victims. Then Poland was invaded. Although Austrians and Sudeten Germans were considered being Germans, and helped in the war, but so did Polish people - otherwise they would've been killed. |
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Post by Bardpado on Jul 3, 2008 8:25:43 GMT -5
@bard - Isn't it obvious? They wanted a total domination over entire Europe. ...We, Polish people, were the first victims of the World War II. Yes... I saw the movie "The Pianist"... Indeed depressing. No EMOness (less than 50% EMOness=depressing), but, depressing nonetheless. And no one convict us of off-topic-ness, please. |
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Post by Weegee on Jul 3, 2008 12:59:15 GMT -5
As long as I'm updating, there's really no reason NOT to be off-topic. It keeps the board alive, and it keeps the lot of us from necroposting. Which this thread will not come to, because of my constant updates. Onishiba: Austrian... I knew I read somewhere when I started here. *growls* Anyway... @bard: I wanted it to be as dramatic as possible. This way, we have a bunch of stuff that could happen. What happens next is unimaginable. Or it's as epic as I seem to see it. I'm not Hitchcock, you know. @everyone who's talking about WWII: Remember the teachings of Eddie Izzard! "Hitler was a German bastard!" Personally, before we talked about the invasions in school, I couldn't quite grasp the imporatance of it. School and Grave of the Fireflies changed that. That movie is like the only one that can make me cry. |
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Post by Shinji-kun on Jul 3, 2008 13:09:34 GMT -5
Hitler was not a German bastard. He was an Austrian bastard... /sorry Fay./
...You are not Hitchcock? Are ya sure?... [/sarcasm]
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Post by Onishiba on Jul 3, 2008 13:13:34 GMT -5
He may have been born in Austria, but he wasn't successful here with arts school, so he left Austria and became citizen of Germany (removing his Austrian citizenship) and, even after sitting in prison, chancellor of Germany.
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Post by Weegee on Jul 3, 2008 13:23:56 GMT -5
shinji: I'm no clone anyway. I'm not the master of suspense, so I don't think I can be good as Hitchcock. Onishiba: Correct. However, it was Eddie Izzard that implied the thought that Hitler was purebred German. Flippin' British brain ninjas.
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Post by Shinji-kun on Jul 3, 2008 18:23:01 GMT -5
*Points at [/sarcasm] at the end of the post*
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Post by Weegee on Jul 3, 2008 19:05:34 GMT -5
Aye, Asu- wait, WHAT?!? *looks at what was at one point Shinji's post* ... ...... Don't you need to have extensive surgery to change genders like that? Major  . Thanks for the, uh, post. I kinda, uh, got it. |
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Post by Weegee on Jul 4, 2008 0:39:13 GMT -5
Double-post of updatery! Of other kinds. I'm not exactly updating the story right now.
TIMES UP! The correct answers were jokery, excusingly, awesometude and aglare.
However, Fay did get one word right, so I can give you a hint what it's going to be about. When you guys participate again, I'll reveal more. If you find all the words in a certain part of the story, I'll update the second one. However, there is no word search in this one. Here's the prologue to my other project, "Crash Master", so you should all thank Fay.
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Crashman studied the ruins very carefully, and he crept around really quietly. He didn't want to miss anything subtle. Thunder crashed in the background, adding to the already creepy feel of the Wily fortress's appearence. It looked a lot like the ruins from the beginning of Final Fantasy X. All of a sudden, he felt a hand touch his shoulder. He turned around fast and was ready to make napalm jelly out of the one who dared toucheth his shoulder. It was just Snakeman, one of the comrades on his scouting team, who was as scared as Crashman was, only he had his hands in the air as if in surrender.
"Jessssussss, Crassssshman! Don't be sssso jumpy. You might jusssst blow up this old Wily fortresssss," Snakeman exclaimed.
"Heh, sorry," Crashman said, smirking. "So where's the rest of the squad?" Snakeman shook his head.
"They're elsewhere in the fortressss, what do you think?" Snakeman asked. All of a sudden, Snakeman's com-device went off. "What issss it, Geminiman?" All they could hear was static. "Geminiman, come in!" Just static.
"What's wrong?" Crashman asked rather nervously.
"Geminiman won't pick up. Hissss ssssignal issss being jammed ssssomehow. We need to ssssseek him out, or he'll be decccceassssed. I sssseem to have here hissss bassssic coordinates." Crashman was not amused.
"Do you just use that accent to piss me off, or because you just so happen to use a lot of words with the 's' sound?" Crashman asked, tapping his foor on the ground, looking impatient.
"Eh, it jussst happensss. Anyway, to Geminiman's whereaboutssss!" They ran forever to find Geminiman. They climbed stairs upon stairs upon stairs.
"Y'know something, Snakeman," Crashman belted out while running and panting, "I don't remember these stairs being here."
"Wily redecorated when you were put out of commissssssion. He put the sssstairssss here when the third generattttion wasssss around. That'sss me and the other third game robotssss," Snakeman replied. Crashman growled. Thunder crashed again when they found the door to where Geminiman was. Upon opening the door, a laser flashed in between them, piercing Crashman in the torso region, oil and robotic parts spewing on the floor. Crashman fell to the ground. He started to become unconscious. His memory back-ups started to misfire, which is what he heard what would happen before he died.
He saw when he was being built by Wily, was launched into space and then destroyed by Megaman. That much you know. After Wily found Crashman dead on the side of the tubing that made up his fortress, Wily decided to place Crashman in a stasis tube for rebuild-and-reboot. Crashman woke up in a strange new place where robots were in scrap-heaps and Reploids were the dominant robotic species. Along in the room with him were Metalman, Snakeman, Geminiman, and Shadowman. They made up a pact to blend into society. But they realized Wily was nowhere to be found, so they required input. They eventually found Maverick Hunter HQ where they got input to fight for the forces of good. Along with them, they gathered commanding leaders X and Zero, but their true captain of office was a Reploid named Axl. He was the one in charge of training them. And to do so, he asked them to check on the ruins of the Wily fortress for any clue on the cure to the Maverick virus.
Crashman subdued into reality, as all of his systems shut down. All he could was Snakeman in the background yelling to his com, "Geminiman'sss gone Maver-ack!" Snakeman had been shot too, this one in the head, making him stone dead. Crashman used what little reserve power he had to contact Captain Zero what happened.
"We need.... back-up," he said. His systems shut down. Little synapse went through his positronic brain at the moment, but one thought was clear. "I'm gone for good," some little voice kept repeating. It soon faded, quieter, and then below a whisper, then silence. Just pure, dead silence. No thunder. No Geminiman. No anything.
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What did you think of that one? It's going to be hard to update both, but there's someway I'm going to make them character numbers dwindle. Plus, I'll write one on a schedule, the other whenever I want. Yeah.
FROM NOW ON, CRASH MASTER WILL UPDATE EVERY SUNDAY, WHILE CTS WILL UPDATE EVERY DAY. *Some things may change, making CTS update weekly as well.*
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Post by Foozdude on Jul 4, 2008 1:57:01 GMT -5
However, Fay did get one word right, so I can give you a hint what it's going to be about. Fooz gets no love. ._. Also, trust me, focus on one thing at a time. I care not for your possible multi-tasking, it will get out of hand, unless you've planned both stories entirely and are merely posting chunks from a section. Story-wise, I dislike it, but that's personal opinion. Seems a bit 'far off', for Mega Man fanfics, too... but, whatever. Your choice, amirite. Descriptiveness, what happened to it? I miss the lines upon lines of imagining and visualizing a landscape or dwelling. D: Also, almost never reference copyrighted material, especially when you're focusing on a Mega Man story and use Final Fantasy to describe it. It's vague, it gives some readers no idea on what the area looks like, and overall, it's lazy of you. Blarg, I apologize if any of that did not make sense. I'm distracted, and so is my train of thought. |
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